I like the sense of mystery that your poster gives off. It kind of alludes to Helen Kellers situation of being in the dark. Not to mention, the light at the end of the tunnel.I think its great, i dont really see any need for improvements.

Good Job Rachel! I really like your use of the eraser tool, the crop is quite clean, and blends smoothly into the background. I also like how you showed yourself as opposed to Pele, it explains the allusion. (Sort of)... But I do agree with Maurice. Other than that good job.

Final Poem

call Me by

schrute

call Me by

dynamite

the person is the same

but different is the name

vast knowledge I bear but not of beets

instead you’ll find many other feats

summer thinks Im cool-ish (sometimes)… though,

I’m out of the norm “vote for pedro”

I’m fun; know Me, you’ll see in a lick

unless we’re riding bikes into brick

a monster baby is very tall

this trait I have except I don’t crawl

I’ve had curly hair now for a while

*grin*

not on my head but down on my shin

see I’m unique I’ve crafted these rhymes

though they were  desperate, nickels and dimes

I’ve spoke through my voice it’s who I am

now you know Me

Poem Graphic

ME

you’re drinking 1%...I notice.
I may be a bit socially awkward,

But I’m not telling you to vote for Pedro,

I’m just saying Summer might want to play tetherball with me

I am not that of a celery farmer,

Still with roots

perhaps a beet,

like Schrute I am creative,

From blue energy I run-

off

I'm tall, but I wasn't a monster baby,
and I didn't grow up with my grandma,
Iv'e absorbed my surroundings,
(luckily there weren't any onion patches)
I am a product of my environment

My Portfolio

Portfolio

Angry Letter

94-1008 Palaiki St.

Waipahu, HI, 96797

Nov 25, 2012

Kapolei Hale

1000 Uluohia St

Kapolei, HI 96707

Dear City and County of Honolulu: Department of Planning & Permitting,

My Grandparents have been adding on to their house, as they’ve been wanting to put it on the market. Recently, they built a cement patio that required a building permit. The application forms were easily accessible through the online website, as was filling the forms out. (Which we greatly appreciate)

But, we had some problems in physically turning in the applications for approval. Last month, we visited the Kapolei branch in hopes of quickly submitting our forms. We were pleased to have an office nearby as we were planning on doing several other construction projects. When we arrived at the DPP, however, we were surprised to see an extremely long line. There was more than one attendant, which helped move the line along, but not by much. I understand that it might be too costly to hire more attendants, and that’s why I think you should invest in other methods. Many other places offer online document submission services that are very quick and efficient. Law abiding citizens should not have to wait in line for 3 hours just to submit an application form.

Luckily, our attendant was very helpful and friendly and did her best accommodate us. She was very understanding, and apologized for the wait. If waiting this long was occasional, we would have been fine with it, but this occurred consistently in the weeks that came.

I have no problems with applying for building permits, I just believe that it should be much, much easier.

Sincerely,

Dustin Palea