Thursday, January 17, 2013

ME



you’re drinking 1%...I notice.
I may be a bit socially awkward,
But I’m not telling you to vote for Pedro,
I’m just saying Summer might want to play tetherball with me

I am not that of a celery farmer,
Still with roots
perhaps a beet,
like Schrute I am creative,
From blue energy I run-
off

I'm tall, but I wasn't a monster baby,
and I didn't grow up with my grandma,
Iv'e absorbed my surroundings,
(luckily there weren't any onion patches)
I am a product of my environment

3 comments:

  1. Good job! At first, I was like "what the heck?!?" but as I searched up all of these hints, I figured it out. Haha. I liked how you alluded two different characters. I like how you referred to your "awkward" side but I do think though that you should refer to your smartness! Hahaha. After you include that, I think your poem will be even better. Again, good job!

    Maurice

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  2. Oh, I left this out but I also think that you should hint more things about your alluded character so people like me don't have to search it up multiple times. Hahahaha. Okay good luck with your final!

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  3. great start. you did a good job with your allusion to napoleon dynamite however we still dont truly get a sense of who you are. yes you are a bit awkard but there is so much left unsaid. Also, not sure if the schrute reference is an actual allusion but more so a metaphor. You want to reference characteristics of the schrute and how it resembles you. AS(2+)

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